Here's #2...Self Critique

Here is the second in the series that I'm working on, still keeping with the 12" x 24" size. I havent worked for a focal point but did try for even movement across the piece. I've appreciated the comments that people have been sharing with me and look forward to hearing some more. Remember, I have a thick skin....

Here they are with the image rotated 180. I prefer the one on the left as the darker area is at the top.

This is what I think works well:

• there is good variety of value across it
• the strong lines are repeated in different sizes
• the concept of a grid is more consistent
• there is a more constrained colour palette

This is what doesn't work:

•  it appears rather chunky/blocky
• the right side of the piece is heavier

 I have found that as I'm working through the series, I'm in love with the one I'm working on and feeling less love for previous ones (If you can't be with the one you love, love the one you're with!) So #3 is quite exciting for me!
But here is #2 as a horizontal piece and I find it far more engaging with more movement than the previous orientation. However the centre bottom needs a little more colour.

Here it is cropped a bit closer to the 12" x 24" that it will end up being.

Any more comments that you'd like to add? #3 will be posted sometime early next week, I'm off to go kayaking this weekend.